Great advice from University-Bound. You can also read real “why us” essays on AdmitSee.
I’ve written a bit about this before here.
I’m going to give you an example of what I did:
Please tell us what you find most appealing about Columbia and why.
#1. What DO I find most appealing? For me, it was the Core Curriculum and getting a well rounded education. Columbia emphasizes not only learning from classes, but also from peers (discussion-based seminars) and surroundings (it’s in NEW YORKKKKKK CONCRETE JUNGLE WHERE DREAMS ARE MADE OHHH THERE’S NOTHING YOU CAN’T DO). That kind of attitude is what I like.
#2. How can I convey HOW these things that I like about Columbia fit into WHO I am? Basically, you are answering that actual “why” part of the question. Step 1 was just brainstorming ideas; step 2 is analyzing how these ideas reflect you. In my case, I talked about how the Core fits with my interdisciplinary learning style/love of learning in general and about how my experience with communal education from a summer science camp makes me crave the close-knit learning exchange that happens at Columbia.
#3. Notice how you could take those general ideas from Step 2 and write several variations. The variations come from the flair and how you write. Instead of saying “I love science; I love liberal arts,” I used a quick one sentence childhood anecdote that epitomize my excitement about science and I described my love of words and language with a poetic description of reading in bed and emerging with “puffy eyes” yet “better vision and insight.” OH SNAP IS THAT A PUN I SEE THERE? Even that is so me. And etc. with the rest of the essay.
#4. Of course, EDIT EDIT EDIT. Make sure you are always showing and not just telling. Make that tricky “Why _____?” essay into something that truly tells something about YOU and how YOU fit.
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